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Ron-Lan Shen, a lady with perfect make-up, curly hair and a white outfit. She may seem like a 40 years-old woman, but she’s actually 52 now. She is what we call a typical Korean “O-Ba-Sun†(mid-aged women). In Korea, there are over 7 million females that are over 50 years-old. That is 15% of its total population. These women are the key players for economic growth behind the scene. They are firm, persistent, doughty; and most importantly, family always comes first. Ron grew up in South of Korea, got married at the early twenties and had three lovely children, a full time housewife. Her husband franchised the largest fast food chain stores in Korea. He owned two restaurants. In 2004, Ron’s husband decided to invest a golf court in Haikou, China, with everything he owned but lost all within three years. She felt ashamed because the entire family depended on this. They had to rely on their parents financially. She was forty-six. Ron said “I have to do something for the family, no matter how tough life can be. Korean women would fight till death, and do anything in their power for their family.†April 2007, Ron joined Avon doing direct selling. It was her first job. She was very excited when she got her first salary, it was NT$75,000. She felt she’d finally achieved something valuable in her life. Korean women, including her, believed ‘family always comes first.’ Women in her generation also believed being the perfect wife is a must. Even though, she’s now making more than 10 thousand NT dollars annually, she still wakes up early to make breakfast and does all the chores by herself. To these women, being a housewife is a career, a field of expertise. They are in charge of the money, kids’ education and even their kids’ marriage. In 2006, Karen Wang who is now the GM of Avon Taiwan and Korea took over Avon Korea, which was already in debts for the past decade. Karen is good at encouraging and inspiring. She successfully turned things around; the sales expanded 124% and still increasing as of last year. Karen sees a great difference between Korean and Taiwanese women, she indicated that “Korean women are very tough, when I have a meeting with them, I can feel the competitiveness at all times. They have strong characteristics. They are born to be leaders.†Karen encouraged them. She believed in them. She believed these women are born to be a "somebody.†She believed each one of them played an indispensable role. Karen observed that most Korean women wear make-up. Taiwanese women on the other hand, not all, and some only apply lipstick only. Nowadays, appearances value a lot in Korea. And to girls, the best gift from a parent is longer a motorcycle or laptop, it is a plastic surgery. The desire of “BEAUTY.†i'm trying to translate an article, it has a pic of a korean woman in white suit. "We..." refers to Taiwanese. how do i give more pts?
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This is much too long for 2 points. I will help you with the first part. "Ron-Lan Shen, a lady with perfect make-up, curly hair and a white outfit. " is not a sentence. There is no verb.
